Thoroughly enjoyed your story. I thought your use of AI was timely and original - sinister in the beginning, more human at the end. The pacing, in the way you build tension, made the story captivating.
This is so vivid! And creepy, lol. Love this line: “Erin felt no fear now, only an ache. They were so close now. “You wanted to learn what makes us human,” she said. “It isn’t the mind. It’s the heart that breaks and still keeps beating.”
So the machines run the numbers, crunch the data, simulate every outcome… and still get outplayed by a mom with a nervous system and a refusal to quit. Classic. Turns out the thing AI can’t optimize is the part that says “I don’t care what this costs me.” Great story. Also mildly reassuring that when the robots come, love is still the glitch in the system.
This is gripping, Dawn, and so well written. Loved it.
Thank you so much! I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Thoroughly enjoyed your story. I thought your use of AI was timely and original - sinister in the beginning, more human at the end. The pacing, in the way you build tension, made the story captivating.
Thank you!
This is so vivid! And creepy, lol. Love this line: “Erin felt no fear now, only an ache. They were so close now. “You wanted to learn what makes us human,” she said. “It isn’t the mind. It’s the heart that breaks and still keeps beating.”
Thank you! The original spark of the idea came from a dream I had.
Dawn! I’m not even a sci-fi person and I love it!! Well done!!
Thank you! I didn't think I was a science fiction person either. I wrote this for a school assignment originally. It's fun exploring new things.
So the machines run the numbers, crunch the data, simulate every outcome… and still get outplayed by a mom with a nervous system and a refusal to quit. Classic. Turns out the thing AI can’t optimize is the part that says “I don’t care what this costs me.” Great story. Also mildly reassuring that when the robots come, love is still the glitch in the system.
Yes, you got it! Thank you. 🙂